I was recently asked to give a lecture on how to incorporate tension in creative writing to a group of English Home Language Grade 11 learners. I have also been asked to give a lecture about using technology to teach creative writing at a teaching conference later this month, so I used the tension lesson as a pilot. Below is a copy of the worksheet I gave to the students as well as a summary of how I used the audiobook and movie versions of The Hunger Games to provide students with an effective example of tension. Enjoy!
Tension
in Fiction Writing
What
is tension?
Tension is a state of mental or emotional stress,
usually with an element of suspense.
Types
of tension:
There are many different types of tension. Here is a
short list: horror, mystery, romantic tension, social tension, familial
tension, nervous tension, and comedic tension.
How
do we create tension?
All scenes with well-written tension have:
1. Something at stake (i.e. survival)—This
generally means that there are two (or more) possible outcomes to the main
character’s situation. The higher the
stakes, the greater the tension.
2.
An
emotional component—The reader must be emotionally invested
in the character. If the reader does not care what happens to the protagonist,
the tension is not effective. Therefore, when writing a scene with tension,
writers need to appeal to universal emotions that the readers can relate to,
such as love, hate, anxiety or fear. Writers achieve this through descriptive
language.
3.
Descriptive
language—Scenes with tension typically have vivid detail and
strong verbs.
a.
Strong verbs, or power verbs, are
verbs that convey meaning in one word and can replace passive phrasing. For
example, “He delegated the tasks,” rather than “He told everyone what to do” or
“Blood pooled on the floor,” rather than “There was a pool of blood on the
floor.” Strong verb choices make the sentences active and direct. Not all
sentences should or have to be active and direct, but an abundance of passively
worded sentences detracts from the quality of the writing, as the extra words
weigh down the narrative.
b.
Verbs like see, hear, and feel are
actually weak verbs. It is great to appeal to the senses and describe what the
protagonist experiences, but this can be done without the verbs “see” or
“hear.” For example, rather than saying “I could see a knife in his hand and
could feel a cold sweat spilling down my back,” try writing the sentence
without “see” and “feel” and focus on describing the knife or how seeing the
knife makes the narrator feel. “The knife gleamed in the sunlight and a
menacing smile spread across my attacker’s lips. Cold beads of sweat trickled
down my back. I’ve only got one chance to make it out of here alive, I
realized, one chance, starting now.” The second example is stronger because it
tells what the narrator sees, feels, and thinks without explicitly saying so.
Sometimes words like see, feel, and hear weigh down your writing. Other times,
they are necessary. The word “realize” in the second example might not
necessarily be needed, but the sentence reads well with it included. It’s okay
to include weaker verbs to add variety as long as there as strong verbs
present. An overabundance of weak verbs slows down the pace and reduces the
tension. Luckily, making weak verbs strong is an easy fix.
c.
Show don’t tell. Tense scenes often
use descriptive language to show what the reader is physically
experiencing. In thrillers, rather than
saying “I’m scared,” there is typically a reference to sweat or the heart pounding
in order to illustrate fear. Romance writers also use sweat and a pounding
heart to describe what the narrator feels when being kissed. In this situation,
it is meant to illustrate love. The same bodily responses can be used to fit
multiple situations.
d.
The descriptive language in tense
scenes typically focuses on what the character feels. Is his chest tight? Do
his fingers tingle? There is less emphasis on describing the setting because
this slows the pace of the story down and reduces the tension. Some writers
intentionally add in descriptions of the character’s surroundings to slow down
the pace. Describing the setting is not a bad thing. However, one must make
sure that the descriptions are relevant to the story. If it is a scary story,
describing the shadows dancing on the wall could add to the suspense. Noting
that the main character’s best friend is wearing track pants does not—unless of
course, the track pants are an important detail later. Choose your details
carefully.
Remember:
Tension must build!
How
to break tension:
·
As noted above, the tension can be
slowed down or “broken” by taking the reader out of the immediate action. Focusing
on the scenery, for example, might all the reader a moment to process. One could
then oscillate back to the tense moment. A pause in the action not only allows
the reader to breathe, but also keeps them wondering what will happen next.
·
Another way to break the tension is to switch
the point of view. If there is more than one narrator, switching between them
at a tense moment, allows for pause and increases the suspense. If the story is
in third person, focusing the reader’s attention on another character has the
same effect.
·
One could also insert a scene or chapter
break to build the tension. Use a cliffhanger. Get your reader to want to turn
that page. It’s similar to how TV shows use “To Be Continued…” They end the
show right at the climax, just before we learn our hero’s fate.
The Reaping Scene in the Hunger
Games and What it Teaches us about Tension
After giving my
students a lecture on tension, using the above as a worksheet/guide, I asked
how many had read the book or seen The Hungers Games movie. None had, though some
had heard of it.
In the interest of
showing how tension works and also incorporating simple technology in the
classroom, I used my laptop to play a selected clip (roughly 10 minutes) of the
audiobook followed by a clip of the movie (roughly 8 minutes). Most South African
schools, or at least the ones I’ve worked at, are hurting for technology.
Students have internet on their phones, but the classrooms do not have wifi or
smart boards. Most just have chalkboards.
Luckily, my laptop screen
is pretty big and it was a smaller class (20 students), so they were all able
to crowd in the center of the room and watch the movie as I held the laptop.
One girl commented that the screen was dark. This lead into a discussion of
lightning and how lighting can illustrate tension. Katniss’ house was very
dark, but the reaping scene was out in the open and very bright.
I played the audiobook
version of chapter one and the very beginning of chapter two. I asked students
to write down examples of descriptive language as they listened. We then talked
about the effect of ending chapter one with a cliffhanger, namely that Prim,
the narrator’s sister, is chosen. The second chapter starts with a brief anecdote. Katniss recalls a time when she fell from a tree. This serves as a brief pause in
the tension. However, the tension escalates when Katniss compares the feeling
of falling out of a tree to hearing Prim’s name be called.
Prior to showing the
movie clip, I asked the students what they thought of when I said “holding
hands.” I got a variety of answers all revolving around dating. We had spoken about how physical responses can
mean different things depending on the context. Katniss and Prim hold hands to
show support. It illustrates their worry and fear as well as their sisterly
love.
The film also shows
tension through contrast. The fact that Effie had a pink wig confused my
students when we read and they got a real kick out of seeing her in the movie.
Her attire shows wealth and contrasts to the plain clothes the kids wear. Katniss takes a bath and does her hair to look nice for the reaping, but her
wardrobe shows she is poor. When she gets made over as part of being a tribute,
she is given more elaborate garments. Effie’s “happiness” and the sober nature
of the children in the crowd further illustrate the contrast and this adds to
the tension, especially when the children all hold up their three fingers as a
sign of solidarity and support.
